Revised Paragraph from Pro Con Paper

It is a proven fact that while working out or doing an activity it makes us hot and sweaty. It is also a proven fact that those who live in warmer climates get something to drink more often. With both of these facts being put together, comes the idea of putting less fluoride in those who live in warmer climates water. This idea has been thought of and processed as to how much fluoride should be added to water. Those who live in warmer climates tend to get drinks more often then those who live in colder ones. Therefore, meaning they don’t need as much fluoride in the water. According to table 33-1, on page 550, of the Clinical Practice of the Dental Hygienist book, it gives information pertaining to this topic. When the temperature is a little colder between 50-53.7 degrees F the fluoride concentration is 1.2 parts per million (ppm), when the outside temperature warms up between 58.4- 62.8 degrees F the concentration is 1.0 ppm, and when the temperature is hot between 79.3-90.5 degrees F the concentration is 0.7. Typically the ppm added to the water is in-between 0.7-1.2, what it all coming down to though is the temperature of the outside weather.

Revised:
It is a proven fact that while working out or doing an activity makes us hot and sweaty, leaving us thirsty. It is also a proven fact that those who live in warmer climates get something to drink more often. With both of these facts being put together, creates the idea of putting less fluoride in those who live in warmer climates water. A logical idea such as how much concentrate to add has been thoroughly thought about and actually tested, and proven this hypothesis correct. According to table 33-1, on page 550, of the Clinical Practice of the Dental Hygienist book, it gives information pertaining to this topic. When the temperature is a little colder between 50-53.7 degrees F the fluoride concentration is 1.2 parts per million (ppm), when the outside temperature warms up between 58.4- 62.8 degrees F the concentration is 1.0 ppm, and when the temperature is hot between 79.3-90.5 degrees F the concentration is 0.7. Typically the amount added to the water is in-between 0.7-1.2 ppm, depending on the climate. If the amount gets any higher then 1.2 ppm, is when it starts becoming dangerous. Having the correct amount of fluoride concentrate added into water is key too creating and revealing a healthy smile.

Transitive and Intransitive Verbs

A transitive verb is incomplete without a direct subject. To get a better understanding of what that is actually saying, lets look at a few examples. The shelf holds three books and a glass vase, the committee named a new chairperson, the child broke the plate. All of those sentences have a direct subject being used, holds, named, and broke. Without these a sentence can become boring and confusing. The following are some examples of when there are no transitive verb, but there should have been. The shelf holds, the committee named, or the child broke. Those sentences seem to stop and leave us thriving for more information.

Intransitive verbs cannot take a direct subject. To better understand this one the following examples help explain it. This plant has thrived on the south windowsill. Has thrived is the intransitive verb and the prepositional phrase, on the south windowsill, describes where the plant has thrived. Another example is, the train from Montreal has arrived four hours late. The ins transitive verb, has arrived takes no direct object, and the noun phrase four hours late acts as an adverb describing when the train arrived. One more example just to help get the idea is, the painting was hung on the south wall of the room. Was hung is the intransitive verb because its not taking the direct object, and on the south wall of the room is describing where the painting was hung.

I have had trouble mostly with using the transitive verbs. I tend to start writing and have too many other things on my mind to remember to finish my sentences. The things i find best that helps me is to set my writing aside and come back to it later. This insure that I catch all my stupid mistakes. If you want to find more information on these verbs visit this website, it has really great information and is from a reliable source.

Complications Part 1

WOW!! I really like this book a lot! I have had a hard time putting it down. One thing that I really like is, that he tells personal accounts; it makes the book more interring. It would be hard being a doctor and having to worry about, is this person going to die on my table. That would be the worst part of becoming a doctor, in my opinion. Gawande was telling of an account he had had when trying to help a trauma patient. The woman's vitals were fine but she was having a slight problem breathing on her own. Trying to get the tube down her trough, wasn't working, and with each try her vitals would start to slip. This soon led Gawande and eventually another doctor to give her an emergency "trache". The women pulled threw, luckily, she was very close to death. Another thing I found interesting is that some things come naturally to some doctors and not to others. Central lines for example, was something Gawande had trouble with, but with practice and much dedication things eventually clicked and he was able to preform the task. In general I really enjoy this book, it puts doctors in a completely new light. I respect them even more then I did before.

Apostrophes

There are many times when writing an essay that I get scared and a little nervous that my grammar wont be or isn't good. I just recently had an example of this is. Last night I submitted my paper to the writing center online, I am pretty sure I didn't use the correct grammar. I got a little nervous that they might read my email and not want to actually read my essay...haha The issue wasn't if the correct word was used or where to put the comma, it was, where does the apostrophe go? I have always had trouble with those little guys.

In the St. Martin Guide to Writing, it helps us determine where and when to put them. There are many options you can choose from, but the ones I am going to tell you are the ones I have the most trouble with. One option is to place the apostrophe so that it marks the possessive form of nouns and some pronouns. First you have to distinguish though if it is a singular noun (one item) or a plural (two or more items). Some examples are...a student's parents, the cat's tail, Katie's essay. These show who has the possession. Be careful where you place the apostrophes you don't want the reader to mistake your word for a plural noun instead of a singular one; it can completely change the entire outlook of your sentence. An example of this can be, The apartment's design lacks softening curves to tame the bare walls. If the apostrophe had been placed after the s it would mean more the one apartment looked that way.

A lot of people have trouble, including me, when or if you place apostrophes in personal pronouns. When you are using possessive forms of personal pronouns you don't need to put an 's in words such as, yours, its, hers, his, ours, theirs, etc. It's a common mistake too make.

Hopefully as we continue to writing we will be able to find where these tricky little apostrophes go, and not them get to the best of us.

Please Give Me Some Advice

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David Lee- Poet

Last Wenesday I attended the poet, David Lees reading. I wasn't sure of what to expect because, I had never attended anything of the sort. The reading was very interesting because you actually get to see where he wanted to put an emphasie and where he wanted to make it more dramatic. David Lee was quite funny, he would use a lot of hand guesters, and change his voice tone and pitch. Some of his poems were really enjoyable, but there were some that I just didn't get. I would enjoy going to another reading.

Mixed Constructions in Sentences

I know I just did this in class today, but when I write things down and put them in a place that I look often, I remember them. The question is what are mixed constructions? Sentences that change structures midway through, and they don't logically fit well together. I have a problem with this because I will often start writing with no purpose. I start a sentence with one idea and end it with another. This is a habit I need to break. In a tutorial about mixed constructions by Bedford/St. Martin's it helps us get a better understanding of these sentences. From this article there are three things they suggest you do; make sure phrases or clauses work well together, make subjects and predicates consistent or agree, and avoid the constructions; is when, is where, the reason is....because. The follow are some examples that can help us better understand.

Make phases or clauses work:

Wrong: The fact that the marathon is twenty-six miles, a length that explains why I never have finished it.

This sentence starts out with an independent clause (the fact) which is followed by a dependent clause (that the marathon is twenty-six miles). All this sentence needed was a predicate to make it complete, but instead it added another noun (a length) and dependent clause (that explains why I never finished it).

Corrected: The marathon is twenty-six miles, which is why I never have finished it.

Subject Predicate Agreement:

Wrong: The most valued trait in an employee is a person who is loyal.

The reason why this doesn't work is because a person cannot be a trait. The way it reads right now is saying that it is.

Correct: The most valued trait in an employee is loyalty.

Avoiding is when, is where, the reason is....because:

Wrong: Indigestion is when you cannot digest food.

You are using is when.

Correct: Indigestion is the inability to digest food.

As you fix this sentences they become easier to read, and less confusing.

Painting Review

The support by Rolinda Stotts is captivating because of the contrast, texture, and symmetry. The instant I looked at this painting I fell in love with it. Its warmth is very inviting, and reassuring. This is done by the contrast/color palette Rolinda chose. Upon first glance you see white aspens popping off a brown textured canvas. The painting doesn't look like it was done on normal canvas though; it looks like it was done on a piece of wood. I believe this was done on purpose, to keep the same theme of trees alive. Looking at the painting closely you can see that there is a distinct texture. When you get closer it looks as though it is bark. The painting also creates a nice symmetric look making it look clean and crisp.

I think Rolinda created a piece of artwork that is absolutely amazing. There are so many different feelings that come from it; you can feel happy, peaceful, warm, etc. That’s the beauty of artwork; you can interpret something completely different then the next. Rolinda probably thought of her painting completely different then what we did. I think that is the intent of a painting like this, to allow others to think for themselves.

Do you have questions?

One question I have often wondered is, who manufactures companies? This type of question has always been something of interest. When finding out who manufactures a certain type of food, it always catches me off guard, I never expect the outcome. Would you have guessed that the company who manufactures Starburst is Mars? I sure didn't. It defiantly caught my attention.

Starburst

Manufacturer
Candy
Marketing
Different Types
Flavors
Ingredients
U.S. or Global
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