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Don’t Stop The Music by Rihanna. I guess you could say this song could be taken literally. I don’t want the music to stop. I love to hear the beats, they make me want to dance and dance crazy. If the music were to stop life would be boring. Think about watching a movie, the music is what creates the mood. If you were watching a scary movie you know something is going to happen just from the sound of the music. When watching a chick flick you start to cry or feel emotions from the music. Now think about if you were driving in a car what is one of the first things anybody reaches for, or has to fix before the car is even in motion? That’s right the radio. Music in this day and age is very important and without it, my life would be very dull and boring.

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Don't Stop The Music by Rhianna. This song could be taken literally. Music should never stop! Hearing the different beats and sounds makes me want to get up and dance. Without these simple things being put together, our lives would be completely boring. A man just walked into a room, pauses for a minute, then continues on his way. Seems innocent, until you add scary music to it. Your movie has just now set a mood, all from some music. This applies to every movie or t.v. show you have ever watched. Now think about this; what is the first thing you reach for when getting into your car? That's right, the radio. Is it not evident how important music is in our lives? Its has become very important. I know that without it my life would be very dull and boring.